Eh...
1. It was too short and didn't explain enough. You have to take into concideration that the reader may be confused, because you didn't give enough directions. When you said how to draw hair, you didn't explain how to draw it. You just said to draw it in different styles. For the reader to understand what you mean, you have to take it by steps, and explain each step a little more.
2. There is no such as a 'newbie' way of drawing. As far as I understand, you should draw a circle for the head first, draw the chin, make a basic stick figure, and draw around it. (This doesn't only apply to the Japanese; all cartoonists must start with a stick figure/shapes) You, on the other hand, did it in such a way that would cause proportional issues. Now, I understand that proportions are only an opinion in anime, because they are not realistic, but if someone just starts out with a 'v' for a face, there may be confusion with the rest of the head...
3. Face? Legs?
4. The shading was strange, and you didn't explain how shading works. It's just 'shading'.
5. If I am being a little harsh about this, please don't take it as offense. Just know that I only wish to improve; not to... uh... destroy. (Wait, that didn't sound right!)
Well, just keep working at it. Know that you can improve lots if you just keep drawing!
~DC