Okay... here's what's wrong with it...
You do know that the Trojan War is only a part of history because of the Iliad right... the Iliad by Homer is the oldest piece of literature to originate from Western culture. According to most historians, if the Trojan War had actually taken place, it was likely caused by the theft of livestock rather than someone's wife--Helen. The problem with your movie is that it seems to be more based off of the terrible movie that came out last year of the same name than the Iliad and the Inniad, which is where the story (in all its forms) originated. The story is so tied to characters like Helen, Paris, Hector, Clytemnestra and Achilles is so tied to Greek myth (given that Helen and Achilles are half-mortal descendants of the gods) that to exclude mythological figures in any retelling of the Trojan War would be like making up your own story about it. You say this was for a history class? Did your teacher point out any of these glaring details to you--that the Trojan War probably didn't even happen, that all the little details that you included like the Trojan Horse are not historical facts, but originate from myth, or that there is no historical, archeological or anthropological evidence that the War had actually taken place, rather all that we know about the War stems from Homer's writings? If he/she didn't, then I would call his/her credentials into question. However, if you were presenting on ancient myth for your history class (something usually reserved for the Language Arts departments), then you did a poor job there too. You made no mention of the Greek Gods, the role the played in the fighting, or the sick fascination with death that consumed them as they took sides during the conflict. The only character from myth that you included was Helen--and very briefly at that. This was neither a lesson in myth nor a history lesson. You negate its historical relevance by presenting on something with a questionable--to say the least--historical context. You didn't even mention the origin of the story or the author who wrote it. You negate its mythological value by leaving out essential characters like say the entire Pantheon of Greek Gods. Essentially all you did was rehash the movie Troy into a subpar and boring flash flick. It's good to see that you were trying to be original, but next time, do some research. Also, you can't "get" death as you put it in your movie... death is something that befalls you not something tangible that can be received (sorry that bothered me). Also, your button about Theseus doesn't work. Better luck next time.
