well...
2 things I'll bring up:
1: buy a mic
Words suck in flash, people need to learn that... you want them looking at your art, or reading!!??!!?
2: Make a movie
You made a movie trailer..... so now where is the movie? if you didn't mean for it to be a movie trailer, then put more meat into it... too many flash out there telling a story about a story, instead of just telling the story. Too many set ups, not enough knock downs
other then that, it's great