Good for credits, but.....
...I think it's a bit too fast paced for something emotional. Like a death of a significent other. Unless it's a montage of the protagonist (spelling?) preparing for revenge on the murderer. That would be cool.
Originality 8: The message you're putting through is pretty unique.
Diversity 6: I think this sounds like a lot of other songs you've produced.
Clarity 9: It was incredibly clear.
Effort 9: I know how hard it is to make something that looks, sounds, and feels professional and this does.
Overall: 8 Pretty freakin' awesome.