It was alright
It wasn't the best but it wasn't bad. The overall thing wasn't too funny but yeah I know how u feel about the personal bullshit with Rose and Jack. I really didn't care after a while. I don't know why they but that bullshit in, it has nothing to do with the mission and I don't wanna here they're relationship problems.
Anyway, you have something goin for u. Just make it more comical. Brainstorming with friends usually works well.