Nice mate,
Nice intro and when it comes in at 0:43 it really hits you and makes ya jump :)
Problems:
1. At about 0:56 there is a double Hih-hat and it sounds a bit trippy,
2.The end is ok but a bit poofy for techno try and beef it up abit (but im no techno expert ;) )
Not bad mate and keep working on it,
GOOD SONG!
Dj SyntheX,
****** Also i have released 2 new songs, I have a dream and My Mind
My mind is my first attempt at hardstyle, Cjeck it out, thanks
The last version were better...
First off: this review is VERRY unstructured and might be hard to undertand do to my bad english and cunfusing way of arranging stuff...
Secondly: Dude, what the hell did you do to this song? D:
You might wonder why i droped the score from 8 to 6... The reason why i did this is because you practicly butchered it... Allow me to explain:
I noticed something about the chorus that you should change that ididnt notice last time. As the chorus is now it plays at the same time, and in the same notes, as the piano. Instead you should try and make it so that the chorus play 1 constant note for each bar(meybe 2 dephending on what sounds best) and then change to another in the next bar.
If you dont understand what i mean then just send me a pb and ill send you a picture that'll exsplain it better:P
I know this isnt my usual style, but i'll jump straight to 0:56 since this is the place where the first noticable change from your previous version occures.
That snare anoys the hell out of me... It sounds like a the beginning of a buildup but instead it keeps on going on in the same rythm. It's too loud and verry unnatural and thus out of place. I suggest you remove it and add some cymbals or something instead.
at 1:09 you bring in a break. It last untill 1:24 and practicly identical to the rest of the song since you the only thing you did was to remove the bass and beat.
After that the melody starts again. from this point and onwards there is nothing new. The "second climax" is the same as the first. At this point the melody is starting to get anoying.
In general: The mastering seemed fine in the last version, but in this version the instruments overpower each other and as such the kick and various other elements in the track got butchered. It also makes the changes from the previous version hard to hear.
You didnt change the second half of the melody eather, so that's still there to pull down the rating. Practicly the first 54 seconds is the same as in the last version, except the mastering is worse.
You also need a break that somehow split the song in to more obvious parts. As for example the break at 1:10 could've been longer and a secondary melody could've been added.
I like the reverb you put on each 2nd of the claps though. That's a nice touch:P
I really have no idea how you should fix the mastering though... I really suck at that myself too:(
Anyway, as first mentioned this review is verry confusing and badly structured. Therefore i'll give you this list with the stuff you should focus on fixing:
-The mastering
-A propper break
-Remove the snare thingy
-Change the second half of the melody
Aight, im getting tired of writing now, so i think ill end this review quickly:P Im sorry i didnt have that many good things to say, but i'd just be repeating myself since i already mentioned them in the review on the previous version:P
-Hellstick
well, there are not many good things to say about it, so thats probably why xD.
Um, im sorry i didnt tell you before you wrote the review, but this was an old version i uploaded xD. i have received a few nice mastering lessons which helped the song a lot.
The problem with the melody is that i dont have a clue how to change it.
for some reason its very difficult to change..
I already tried a countermelody, but that turned out even worse.
Also the snare sounds better at my new version.
I totally agree with the break.
Perhaps i should try to add some other bells to it.
The review was clear to me at most of the review, only the 'Chorus' part is a bit unclear to me.
greets St0rmChaser
Great beginning
4/5 or 8/10. The chorus needs more motion to it (more sound). Just bass, lead, drums, piano, and strings doesn't really make us want to dance. Also, for mastering, add a compressor on the preset brickwall if you want it to have motion and less distortion. I didn't see anything really bad with the mastering, but I would recommend more instruments.
oo thanks a lot paperman =D.
that is criticm to my heart !. instructions =D.
so i can assume that when i put a compressor on preset brickwall, all of my problems are gone =O. more motion and no distortion =D.
Thanks a bunch again =D.
St0rmChaser
Don't worry!
I don't like techno,so imagine how good your song is to make me tell it sounds good.
Try to equalize until you reach the sound you would like.I recommend you adding High-pass to make Highs sound stronger.
Good job!
7/10 4/5
Thanks a lot Palarus =D.
Your review realy makes me feel a little better ^^).
ill await some more good reviews like these to collect some information and criticm about 'what' i can / have to change.
Thanks again,
St0rmChaser