This gets better every time you submit it...
The first time i couldn't understand it but you've added bits and pieces to ammend that.
I think it's very important that you redraw all the scenes before the part where we see those two guys in the car, especially the opening scene, the hand with the needle needs so much improvement.
I don't want this to get through yet because i don't want to lose the motivation to improve it further.
But when it's finished fully and tidied up, i know it'll be awesome.