That's a Lot Better...
While I still think that you can do much better on your own, ignoring LF and the rest, you still have great comic timing. There's no getting around the fact that you have actually created the second-best MGS spoof on Newgrounds, right behind SaintShun's Snake Eater's Chronicles.
I'm not going to bother rating low because of the slams against the other animators. While I still think that you could do much better on your own, without their mention, technically you have done pretty well in setting up your flash. I still wish that you would just let the LF thing go, though. You're plenty awesome in your own right, and could do amazing work if you chose to do so.
Good luck to you.