Very good drawing, and you obviously have some talent. I think the clit you drew looks a little off, so you might want to consider re-working that. The shape of the face is a little awkward, and a bit more shadow on it would really round it off. Other than that, this is amazing. Only be sure to keep in mind that not all hentai pictures have to have enormous breasts. Bigger is not always better. I hope to see more works from you in the future.