What's with the cigar?
Goths smoke cigs..
cigars are too much like taking a drag off a wang..Columbian drug lords have all their men smoke cigars to represent that they all suck the cartel leader's dick..symbolic submission..that's what i see anyway..
beyond the cigar, it looks like an OK start for a possible series of toons..you are following in the footsteps of illwillpress kinda so people will probably put you down for not being as good as them..you've got voices so thats a good start..he's aparently gonna be a jerk, so you better think smart with the content, unless all he's gonna do is say 'fuck you.' then you just have an asswhole..also, the theme song seemed kinda quiet..
you've got room for growth..but then again, i haven't seen your other toons..whatever..