ummm well heres the thing
Okay, just wanna say you have some musical vibes flowing through you and thats good, that will help you in other songs. But that didn't really show. The main thing i didn't like is your set and high-hat. That same beat is used over and over and over again my so many artists. And the hi-hat doesn't complement all the other stuff. I think that if you threw in some upbeat sax, it would make it seem more of a trance, because it sounds like a techno. I also feel like some of the techno themes got way to repetitive, i've heard the same one at least 7 times now. Another thing is the creshendo and decreshendo, they were used too often, i feel. I can see what you were going for in this song, but what that is isn't a half way deal. You either do it pretty well or it crashes and burns. You see what i'm saying? I don't feel like you quite got there. The repeatitiveness, hi-hat, and also the creshendo / decreshendo, screwed that up. I'm apsolutly 100% POSITIVE that you can make this better. Less repeats, more complements, and a better trance over all too; this doesn't sound like a trance. There isn't and great upbeat too. So if you make a 2nd version of this, i'm sure it would be freaking amazing. If you want i will review the 2nd version if you make one, give you some pointers you know.
LET THE MUSIC FLOW!!! YOU HAVE SO MUCH POTENTIAL I can hear it!!!!!! Let it fill you up and the burst out in a symphony of music and sounds!! (I'm not a confusionist)