Thanks for bringing this to my attention!
Wow, I never really get sent stuff, so I figure I must be getting somewhere in the site! Well, let's give this a proper review, shall we?
Overall, the song gives a tone that you wouldn't suspect as being any good. I mean, the way that the song changes constantly, it seems to have a sort of spasmodic tone to it. However, as I listen to the song a few times, I get to realize that there is more to be had in this piece. I do agree that there could be a few things I would change about this song, but I do greatly enjoy what makess this song great. For one, it threatens to stray from the beaten path that songs generally keep to, and doe so in the most unusual way. Points are awarded for bravery in the making of the music! And also, I find that there is a certain flair that makes the song just a little different each time you listen to it, as you pick up on different synths or other instruments.
But, there are a few things I'd complain about. Mostly, it was in the start of the song. I think that the first part of the song, from :00 to :18, could stand to be lengthened a bit. Also, the first synth you hear gets replaced too early by th other one. My suggestion to you would be to either increase the length of time that the first synth plays, or decrease the volume of the second synth. I like the begining, but I need to LOVE it to love a song.
Maybe a few more things I would change, such as the pause separating sections of the song (I'd get rid of the one at the 1:46 mark all together. it makes the song sort of irregular to the ear.) and the general volume of some of the instruments (In the central sections, tone down the main instrument. A song is about the leading instrument as much as it is the ones that follow it!) But I won't go into much detail on those! (lol)
So, a 5 and a 9 are suitable here. Keep up the good work! And thanks for sending it to me! It's not often that I get to listen to personal requests, let alone getting mail! thanks.