You could do better, I guess
The melodylines are great, they're awesome!
But the drums suck ass dude! I'm sorry 2 say it, but they're realy bad man xD
I can hear you work with FL Studio: You should get a nice kick drum sample, then place it in a Mixer track with a Parametic EQ2 and turn the bass up, then place a distortion on it, put the distortion on it, place the switch on B, turn Thres to zero, turn PRE to like 2/3 of the maximum and you have a nice kick drum
Also, I think you should change the sounds you picked with the Sytrus plug in, you can now clearly hear wich sounds you picked, and that's kinda wack, you should change them and make them sound like complete new sounds
If it doesn't work out with the drums, I could help you with it, we could do a track together
Drums are kinda my speciality, hehe, I could make a cool beat under it, if you don't manage 2 make it sound right
Good luck with it! And just send me a message if you would like me to help you =D