Eh.
I kinda like the story line... still not the best... did you draw this whole cartoon using MS paint or an etch-a-sketch? Because the art is lacking. Try using Adobe or Paintshop Pro... If you did this by hand... I will half to laugh. The vocal track doesn't match the lip movement.. hell sometimes thier lips moved but nothing came out. Yes I'm an asshole, but hey, maybe this is give you some motivation to do better.