Reviews for Mana Realm Chapter 1

[desertsnowstorm]

Pretty good.

You've got some good ideas here. Your animation is pretty good and the music that you do have fits what's going on rather well. The only real problems I have with this so far is your subtitles and the intro... and the non-flowing way your capes are drawn and the mouths move. All in all, I think you've got a solid base to build on since you've obviously put quite a bit of work into this. If you want a little more detailed of a response, figure out a way to get ahold of me and I'd be happy to help you along by tossing a few pointers to you here and there. I'd like to see a completed version of this sometime, so don't give up even if this gets blammed.

[System-1]

Good- Could be Better

I thought this was good, well drawn, blah blah blah, but there were some things in here that lowered the vote.

First off, SOUND is needed. after the song, it just went dead... should have gotten some more sounds.

The battle, needs more work, especially from the bird's eye view, warriors dont look like blobs.

other than that, the story and characters are hard to keep track of, but with more development, that can be fixed. Its good to see a GOOD fantasy flash, just dont over or under do it. keep it up, gave this a 3.

[azae]

Nice

You're a good artist! The knights and stuff looked cool. Just work on the battle scene a little

I hope it becomes a series

[RenHoek]

Nice

Original content, attention for detail, appropriate music. Very nice.

Some pointers:

* I would use a fadeout, in the intro. Also use paragraphs!

* Shorten a bunch of sequences. Not so much text in the intro, don't let the viewer wait 30 minutes for a feather to fall. Less is sometimes better.

* Add more music, it was total silence most of the time. Add soundeffects too.

* Adding voices for all the spoken text would probably add a lot to the movie.

[Simon121]

well...

i really liked it at the begining really great story and all, then it looks like you lost intrest as your animation got a bit slopier, but anyway not as bad as everyone is claiming im looking forward to the next one. My only advice is if u could try and improve the fighting animation it would be even better.
Oh and i gave low sound mark because it cut out in the middle.