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You know how it said "to be continued" at the end?
...well, you could save yourself a lot of time if you just didn't make the end to it. Don't bother. That storyline was waaaay to weak. Really, not much of a storyline at all. Keep working on your english, and when you're better at it, then write something.
Oh, and try something original. Don't use characters from video games and twist their personalities.
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it started out exciting but in a flash with no actual talking it kinda got boring. plus the writen diologe was kinda sucky a half way through i was to bord to keep watching. good anamation as a flash user my self i belive you should try origanl charecters u drew. so i give it a 2 for effort.
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Long, Boring, Unoriginal, and To be continued? What the crap.
wow...
its like a bad movie or something dialogue sucks... its like a soap gone worse omg you really need to work on your story lines that was so........ lame.... sad....... degenerating peice of work im sorry to say it... well no im not...... it SUCKED!!
bad.....
Very poor man very very POOR!!!!