It's a-me!
I see you've submitted your film about your last day of school, haven't ya, Tomi?
As a neutral NG passerby I have to say that what needs the most work is graphics and plot. That's about it, really. All that really needs to be done is, perhaps, higher frame rates and that you need a good story.
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not very bad, but technically the flash meant nothing, had little more than an illusion of a plot, and was really, really, really pointless,
one question..
is that thing at the and a mohog?
good, but lacking something... a plot perhaps?
the presentaion in the is flash is excellent. The art is very well drawn, and the music creats a fun feeling. It's also a quick loader which is cool.
However, the whole flash feels like an intro to something - there's not really any interesting story here. There needs to be a bit of dialog, some jokes and stuff, a bit of conflict, that kind of thing.
You know, like the kind of stuff that would actually happen n a class day out :)
I think if you wrote a good plot and presented as well you did here, yu'll be on to a winner.
Lol, thanks for the constructive critisism, I'll keep that in mind =)
Do you really have a little class like this?
but that was a little funny...
Lol, naw, this is just a few kids from it.