Very atmopheric
I think you did a really good job capturing the spirit of playfulness while at the same time making something that is very dramatic. One thing, however, I think you should work on is your endings, this one ended in mid-phrase. It might have been a good thing to fade this out or if you wanted to make it loop than the song should come down to a calmness with which it started so that it flows into the introduction. I think you should give this tune one more try before you declare your self finished with it. It's almost there. Really nice work and thanks for sharing.