Not bad, but...
I pretty much agree with every word of Dark_Knights analysis of the movie, eccept I'm a tad more lenient.
Perhaps this movie would be better respected if it was labeled as a trailer, because the only logical conclusion I could make, is that it was some sort of preview. If so, I'd have to say I'd be interested in seeing a finished product.
note: I gave you some extra points in style for your artistic impression, it turned this short and otherwise meaningless animation into something to be proud of.