I really liked your intention
It is a great idea, but you have some major problems. There's really not much sound, perhaps some voice acting and sound effects? The music wasn't the great of choice either, didn't fit in with what was going on. The spritework was...well...horrible. Also, I must say you are also quite illiterate. The video itself is rather slow moving too.
As for the voice acting, you can contact me and I will be happy to do some for you. The emails doomcreation000@hotmail.com, and the AIMs kaboomx79.
Try remaking this, I really see it having good potential.