Eh
Your animation is substandard, and so is your writing. You didn't credit any of your audio, and nobody really likes serials anyway. You have a great sense of style, though, so you should be working on bigger projects, instead of this sort of thing. Try your hand at more planned out projects, and you'll get better with time.
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Halfway decent graphics, and music that kinda fits in sometimes, but I'm getting sick of long boring plots like this one. I couldnt even sit through the whole thing. And for God's sake when will people learn to stop making text-only buttons that are next to impossible to click?
to bad for you bleotch, ima keep making long boring plots where you have to have an iq above your own age to understand, and maybe if you werent voting with your dick, youd have no trouble resting that mouse on the text only buttons.
<<shudder>>
peeeeeeeeeee-yeeeeeeeeew, that stunk.
Anyways, on a more specific level:
Too long.
and most importantly, revamp your color scheme. Blue text on black and red backgrounds never works. Stick to basic black OR reverse fonts if you want the text to be legible.
this is coming from the guy who gave lick my chacra, and cooking with phsycic man 8s, plus hes a disk jock, egad. if you dont like plots or longer storylines then 30 seconds fine dont watch it