Could be refined.
In the begining, you should try working in some music or fade in the story with some stills. I almost quit watching since there was so much wording and no action. I give you props for the hand-drawn characters, worlds better than stick figures other people submit all the time. The story needs tweaking, and give those two guys a purpose and reason for being there other than being commentators, y'know? It can be better, but you're already steps ahead cause your flash was decent. Hope you do better for your next one.