Longer... Funnier... Overall Better!
I like how you've manipulated your dialogue to fit in with the cutscenes from Max Payne, whilst still keeping Max Payne's style (well, Kind of). I loved the 'insert random metaphor part'. You say you haven't played that far into Max Payne? Then what will happen when you have parodyed(how the hell would you spell that anyway?) all the cutscenes up until the point you have reached in he game? I'm looking forward to plenty more of these... random humor such as the vibrating beretta and coffee cup work for me.
You should give playing Max Payne a chance though, it really is a good, if infuriating at times, game. Then again, if you don't like his random metaphors and philosophical ramblings...