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The basic rhythm is very nice, and I enjoy the strength of the bass! Leave it as it is I say! hahaha~ The only thing I didn't really enjoy that much was the melody in the beginning, it felt out of tune to me. Or maybe it's me, but I don't know. And the sudden pauses in the middle of the song. Is that from the bass? If it is, I guess you should put it down just enough so that it doesn't cause the gap in the rhythm/melody. Very nice either way, and it could have definately been tweaked, but all songs can be. No song is perfect =] It sounds nice for a project you pulled off in 5 hours heheheh I probably wouldn't have been able to pull this off in a month without a friend's help!