So close
You would have recieved 10 from me, but you let yourself down on the drums.
The pattern is good, but considering you had an electric kit, you should have chosen some better sounds. The ones you are using are dull and soft, whereas rock needs something crisp and with alot of attack.
Listen to something like bon jovi. I know that Bon Jovi is a slightly different type of rock, but listen to the drums.
Other than that, keep up the good work; you have great potential.