Wow.
That had style up the wazoo. I loved the way you had the scene kind of "load" as they were entering. It was just really interesting to watch. I really can't find too many problems with it. If I really wanted to be nit-picky, I would disagree with your choice of font. I don't think it really matches with the rest of the scene and is somethings hard to read quickly. I normally like clock movies, but I liked this one even more because of your clocks(how they were shaded+stuff) and how you used them as actual eyes in a sense that you made them move+ indent more and in more places than other clocks. The ending was also a nice touch. I look forward to more submissions from you.