this track is really blurry and wierd.
you need a beat with hihats and stuff.
try and make something more melodic.
If i would give you a tip on how to make a trance song i would have to say, litsen to a trance song first... then try and copy. when you think you have gotten the hang of it, try and make your own melodies and beats.
i hope im making some sense here, because this track man... no offence... it sounds nothing like trance, niether does it sound like it have been put any effort into.
I wish you good luck in your future submissions.