Ghetto!
Ok, well since this is your first submission, i'm not gonna say too much.
You need to work on your visuals, they're lacking at best. Like i say to alot of n00bs you put in more effort than alot of people have done in the past.
For one thing you have a story. Not much of one but its there. The one thing i would deffinatly cut out thou is the crappy computer voices. Either do em youself, or just add some subtitles/speech bubbles. Some of the better stuff don't even have voices.
Keep up the good work.