Maryann sleeps with only a bra on?
Noted….
Here is the uncensored and full lenght version (45m17s long)
You can watch it on Youtube if you prefer, on the description there is proper credits for music, sfx, etc
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=63e0sftQYkE
animation, writing, production, voice action, etc, etc by me
Maryann sleeps with only a bra on?
Noted….
I love this. I like how its basically a “religious satire” episode with sexy and cute anime girls. I also love the accurate angel scene. (Accurate angels are badass as fuck)
Also, why does Cain look emo? Lol.
yo thanks, yeah biblically accurate angels are awesome. hehe, i did aim for a punk rock look for him, cain is evil he killed his own brother so a punkish evil look would fit him
Oh véi, ficou muito engraçado véi, kkkkkk, principalmente as vozes, gostei da animação, e coitado do mlk q n podia nem brincar q era enforcado com o travesseiro, kkkkkkkkk. Dahora mano!
jk29gk vlww maninho fico feliz q tenha gostado, a glr no face chamou de "a cena do travissero" jk2kk tmj boy, o novo ep ficou brabo 7 minuto e poko, uma cena de tiroteio braba braba
Interesting! This really wasn't the story I'd expected, was thinking it'd be more so a massacre in the bedroom, and when the one guy started being suffocated that might've been the turning point of it all but... it really was a bible story. A somewhat truthful depiction of the events that transpire therein - with an unusual dose of gore compared to other similar reconstructions.
The pace is good, the visuals too, despite the common context it was surprisingly captivating as well... the character banter definitely adds a little to that too. Transitions between the room and the story-related visuals work well, and I recognize some of 'em from the individual art. :) Feels like you're in an inner circle somehow...
I am curious how things might change after this, if this is it, if it's a new kind of interpretation of the holy book, or if there's more to it? Do historical events somehow bridge over to the present eventually? Does it end with a twist? Is there a moral of the story when it's all over? Also curious what EOFS stands for?
Two things I think you could improve a bit:
1. Bigger/clearer subtitles. They might not need to be bigger, but would it be possible to export this with better video quality? As it is the text's a little blurry. Same with the animation itself, though not so important with precise edges there as it is with text/readability.
2. Female voices. XD It adds a comical tone when it's all male but... it'd really add a lot regardless. Maybe you can find some VA here on NG that'd be willing to join in?
Overall this was not at all what I expected, and yet more captivating than I expecting. Animation's good, the subtitles are good - appreciate the added note on for example religious phrase usage in Brazil too - the voicing's good too but kinda strange with the genders.
Good stuff here. Seems there's plenty more to get into... will give the longer ones a shot later on! Curious to see where this all leads.
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thanks! EOFS stands for "The Enchanted Ones from Santos" (Santos is a good city here in Brazil, I like to joke and say it's Miami in Brazil). It's an adult cartoon full of humour, social criticism, parodies and such (like Family Guy, South Park, Simpsons, etc). (Christian) religion will be one of the topics covered on the cartoon, as well politics and other society stuff, I did read all the bible and plan to combine some stuff of the christian religion with the cartoon (like the japaneses combine the japanese folklore stuff with their animes), as well other stuff like occultism, satanism, black magic, etc. There are some morals to the stories, i want to let the public thinks about it, but overall it's meant to be an adult cartoon like family guy, south park, etc.
Yeah, the subtitles will be clearer on the next eps, i got some comments about it already. I'm gonna see what i can do about the VA, the next ep will be released soon, it will have an alternative dub version with more people doing the VA i'm gonna see how it will come out.
Once again thanks for your review! And take your time! The other eps are a litle different than this one on many aspects so it will be a different experience for sure!
Ok. You constructed well the setting, the story and the characters' personalities. There's also some care for details, textures and effects of light and shadow, so good job on that. I would have appreciated some more visual differentiation between the characters and their designs, I felt they were a bit too similar to each other, even though their way of thinking and speaking differs so much; I realize they all appear to be poor orphans but notable diferences in their physique, physiognomy and some trinkets and accesories, for example, could go a long way in making each one look and feel unique. Also, the content of their speech varies a lot but some voices sounded pretty similar too, so I would also suggest some work on that. I liked some animations in key moments, like when Zig shows her tongue or when she smoothers the boy and also the ilustration of God when he confronts Adam and Eve for eating the forbidden fruit, if you can add more of those moments, make them more frequent even if with some less detail, I think would be nice. And finally, I see there was a lot of care in translation work and brief written explanations, that can be good but in some of them I felt there was a lot to read with little time available and I don't know how much those added infos can weight in the moment. Oh and also it was quite long for a promo IMO, I would have expected something lasting 5 minutes tops. I think that's it, good work and thank you for making this.
Thanks! Great review, interesting points indeed. Well i try to keep some anime standards by which many of the characters are similar like Sailor Moon, Eiken, Maken Ki, Lucky Star, etc, etc, etc. The biggest weakness on my cartoon seens to be the long duration, i will surely be making shorter and more animated eps on the future, thanks for your help!