Not terrible, plot was pretty good. Although I get the feeling you guys did this to amuse yourselves (which is perfectly fine), if you do want people online to dig it I feel this would be better if
1) you guys were doing voices instead of just reading the lines (even if the characters are self inserts)
2) you guys animated the faces (especially mouths, so it didn't feel as much like you guys were just talking over drawings)
3) you moved a little away from the references to your favorite media, it's pretty alienating.
Also kinda wonder where the art came from since the style is all over the place. Did the voice actors draw their own characters?