I think it's a decent submission. The voice acting isn't the best, but at least I can see that enough effort was put into this. I am really glad that it didn't make me cringe to death like you'd usually expect from submissions with a rating this low.
Also, since I see you can kind of make stuff in RPG Maker and such, maybe try making a sample of your writing into some sort of short RPG. I think it would be more enjoyable that way.