An interesting story with nicely fleshed out characters, relationships great designs and good facial expression transitions for each dialogue. Some typos here and there in the text, I believe I remember reading "Hotel instead of hole somewhere in the story and "mundance" should be mundane, "everythin" is missing a letter, "abhor"? "To see is standing at the door"? and guards is spelled wrong just to name a few. Although you misspellling "psychopath" is understandable. Some scenes could use music as music adds a lot of emphasis for emotion in basically all games, especially visual novels, in fact, I'd argue visual novel games need music the most due to lack of visual action. You COULD add more backgrounds, but I understand that would take a VERY long time to design. Or perhaps you can contribute some sound effects into the game? These small details help shape the game's world. Usually I'd give something missing so much three stars, but you DID have me extremely hooked.

The dialogue branches feel shoe-horned in, like you thought every VN needed them. They don't have any impact (and that's made triply clear in the clunky choose-a-dress scene, where three consecutive choices each ignore the prior). False/stifled player agency feels bad; just remove it entirely. Make this choice-less and tell the story you want to tell.

I wouldn't suggest that if I didn't have confidence in that story. It's interesting and well-written. Let it stand on its own.

The writing is surprisingly good (not the plot, the actual dialogue/imagery), but the art isn't great and the main character isn't likable. Also, there's no save, so when (I'm assuming) I died, it restarted. I'm not going to play the entire game again...

Vi la nota de que demora en cargar el juego, pero llegó a media hora y nunca paso lo que mencionaste, solo se veía el engrane en la pantalla, permitía dar clic en el, pero no mostraba algo.