This has loads of potential- well written story & voice acting, though it does seem a bit illogical at times (After a text from dad to go home she leaves her room and is suddenly back in school at night without ever seeing dad, which seems pretty illogical at the time, and could be easily fixed with an extra line of explanatory writing.
As others have said the navigation is the main problem. Even if you just go vaguely near a door she goes through it whether you click it or not. And the camera changes position in some weirdly inconsistent spots and you then cant switch back. Many times it changed and I had to walk into the middle of the screen and then walk back again just to get the camera to return, or I had to wander around to find the 'trigger spot' for a camera change. Especially awkward then having chase sequences with the navigation system!
Was a lot fresher than most efforts though, Hope you make more projects in future!