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Rudolf's Revenge (Fixed)

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Hii.. This is my first ever animated video..
Please suggest areas to improve.. :)

Here is my channel and video on youtube.. :)

Video :- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_-JR6pphqDA

Channel :- https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCPSPfiRIfG6o5oJ2Rxmxj1w

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what a magical land of constant killing!

Jerry589 responds:

Haha.. :) Thank you for your rating.. :)

It's okay, as far as sprite movies go. You really need sound effects, and actual speech bubbles, as the text blends in with the background way too much. Voice acting would be nice, too. I also felt like this went way too fast as far as the dialogue and the action, with there not being a clear dividing line between the two. Also, use more than just one music track over the whole thing, it makes it feel like it's a montage rather than an animation.

Couldn't really grasp the story between the fast text and the colors clashing.

Jerry589 responds:

Yes, I noticed the things you suggested.. I have a thread about what I think I need to improve.. :)

Areas I think that I need to improve:
1. Make the text longer so that one could read it.
2. Using Symbols(Graphic) for the animation.
3. Using Camera Movements.
4. Some more hard-work..

as this is your first animation. i feel bad for rating it so low, its a good idea, and story. but i have suggestions for improvement. first i think you should try different perspective angles. like when the characters are talking, you have them close up instead of so far away in a field. and when they fight close up a bit too. have the perspective follow what you want us to see, but remember to leave juuuust enough room so we can enjoy the scenery from time to time too. I also recommend you use more than one song, use multiple songs for each scene to help get a feel for the emotion you wish us to feel as we watch. i also suggest some sound effects and perhaps voice acting? the voice acting is not fully needed. but its one way to go :) Good Luck!! I hope i helped and did not offend.

Jerry589 responds:

Your rating is enough, I already know, this is my first, the rating is worthy..
Yes, I already have a thread about what you suggested.. :)

Areas I think that I need to improve:
1. Make the text longer so that one could read it.
2. Using Symbols(Graphic) for the animation.
3. Using Camera Movements.
4. Some more hard-work..
5. Different (suitable) music and SFXs for different scenes..

Thanks your your suggestions. :)

Credits & Info

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7,928
Votes
9
Score
2.75 / 5.00

Uploaded
Feb 2, 2015
12:35 PM EST
Genre
Other