Good work man!
I can see you improved a bit from your last animation, and I see that you implied some of the suggestions I made. Kudos on doing that, it shows you care about your viewers opinions.
It was hilarious, that is for sure.
Thanks, rebelliyous! Your advice really did help me, thank you for it! :)
My score is coming from a variety of reasons, so I'll break them down into categories.
The story is definitely original, but I feel it was ruined between mediums and concept. It doesn't make much sense to me that Bill know's who both people are, but doesn't realize it until later. I do appreciate that you led us to understand why Bill is tied up in the first place.
I wasn't a fan of the animation on-top of photographs. I think it could have really looked up for ya if it was all drawn out or all live-action (Which wouldn't be an animation then). I would have also liked to have seen characters other than "Stick Dudes", it seems very common that I feel it's overused at this point. Even basic character concepts could help. Even character differentiation would help, this way we know which character is which. Maybe make one red, or blue, etc, not all one color.
The audio was "Meh". wasn't terrible, but wasn't great. I felt there was alot of background sound, and echo in the mic. I understand mics aren't created equal, but there are alot of tutorials out there that can fix it. Newgrounds User and Voice Actor "Rice Pirate" made a great budget-friendly tutorial as well, I would recommend seeing that tutorial. I personally think a pop-filter would help reduce the white noise and echo. You can put a sock over the mic or even nylon leggings. You can also put pillows and blankets up on the walls of a small room, and record in there to reduce echo.
I do see in your description that you're working on adding drawn objects and sets. I'm glad that you do realize the concept behind it and going the distance to fix it in the future. That tells me that you are trying, and want to improve. I applaud that. So please don't give up. You can accomplish your goal.
Thank you so much for your constructive criticism. It means a lot to me that someone actually took the time to describe what was good and what wasn't. Even if they rated it one star. I'll definitely look at the tutorials you recommended and I will take your recommendations for what I should do different. Thank you again. :)
At first glance it looked cheesy I played it and laughed a bit. The voice acting is almost perfect and the pictures took were on perfect angles however I think there is improvement needed on your drawing skills
Thanks! I'll keep this in mind! :)
Yeah I'm pretty sure he's gonna die there right?
This gets most of its comedy from how seriously they are taking the situation and how Bill knows exactly where he is while Jim and Kenny are denying that they're in a garage. I may come off as a bit biased because this is my kind of humor (When it comes to animations, at least). The only bad thing I can say is that the animation is a bit lazy. I would normally give this a 4.5, but since this is currently under judgement, I will give you all five stars. Awesome work.
Thanks! I hope you'll enjoy my future animations! :)