I thought it was really rad, I like the style :D All I can suggest is more humor or something, you know, to keep it fresh throughout.
This was quite intriguing in art style and tone. How it was presented was in a crude light yet it was so surreal in a minor sense. Audio was a bit too soft in tone though I heard some of it by sticking my face close enough to hear the speakers to some extent. Again I was taken aback by the unique crude style of your artistic style i really admired it sense I'm a very huge fan of surrealism of any kind and this was just one of them! I'm going to give you a 2 in a half out of 5 and a 3/5 in voting power. you've done a wonderful job here friend! I hope you keep practicing, creating and contributing on here. I hoped you've also enjoyed this review. Good day.
things like better audio and better pacing will come with time