Meh. Not bad, but could be improved.
There are four big problems that I can see:
*The into needs serious improvement.
*I haven't seen the others, but this joke is pretty corny. Not always a problem, but you have to know how to make it funny.
*You should add more jokes to each submission, and make it go by a bit faster.
*The animation is sort of bad.
You will improve overtime. I don't make videos myself, so I can't teach you any new techniques.
You have an idea, but perhaps imporving your technique could make things better. For instance, maybe a shorter intro or smoother drawings.