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Sometimes the best planning comes in a time of rush )
Great music and animation skills, but the music itself ends faster than the animation, plus it ends even faster when I change tab to view other things, there is no voice act in the animation too. :/
Your style is very interesting and the concept was good. However, as others said, the story needs a little clearing up. A little vagueness is nice and leaves it up to interpretation, but in this case it was just confusing. After watching it several times, I'm still trying to decide if the girl was a daughter, wife, employee or someone else. But 4 stars overall.
I'll give you a full four because I love the animation. It reminds me of the sort of thing I do with my cartoon strips -especially the eyes.
Favoritism aside, I'd give it a 3.5 because this is certainly a lovely short, but as you say, the delivery wasn't executed quite as effectively as it could've been. The first time I watched it I thought it was great. The whole package was somewhat mesmorizing, but watching it again... it feels rushed. The animation certainly conveyed what you were trying to get across in each scene, but one thing weakens it -the jump to the woman telling off the manager.
It didn't seem out of place the first viewing, but it does now. It doesn't feel as though the manager has been ignoring her enough to warrant the blowout. It seemed like her first day on the job. If you get around to editing this or redoing it try to put it in a later event in time, she's been working for him for awhile or montage the seasons along with the clock.
As it stands, it doesn't hold up to multiple viewings for that reason. The dread she feels just isn't strong enough to warrant telling him off. Neglect takes time to fester.
I really do hope you do more of these though. I really do like this one. :)