Movement?
Wherever did that go? Unless you got some incredible story going on, the characters should better move around a bit to... feel alive or something. And believe me, it wasn't the case.
Stock characters moving their mouths can work. But here, they just didn't. Not for me, anyway.
Other than that. Yeah, you seem to know what you're doing, and I hope it takes you somewhere. (Skill-wise, I mean)