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My first flash movie, I hope to make a series. Please list ways I can improve. Thank you! All music is piano send-ups.
Pretty Well Done
Not bad... everything was really sketchy which was alright because I enjoy sketchy art like that. I liked the intro song, then the fact that you put Moonlight into the flash made everything so much better.
Had a dark/noir vibe to it at the same time, which could attract a ton of users. Great work for a first, cannot wait to see more.
In order to improve, take some more time with the artistic side of it.
Thank you very much, im working hard to get better.
this might be something
it's hard to tell what's going on. If you're trying to tell a story, focus on ways you can do that. Don't rush through it.
Okay, i will work on it. Thanks for the honesty.
Is... nice try
Stream the music, when yo put the audio keyframe in 1 with loader the loader lasts too much.
as I said, create a layer specialy to the audio and stream it, dont make it an event.
Thanks, sorry the audio messed up...
Great for a first try
THe animation started promising, but then for some reason the quality seemed to drop. It kinda went from style to style too, it would have all been better in the pencil style, before you started filling colours.
It was great for a first flash though, looks promising if you can keep it up like the start, I liked the rough feel to the movie :)
Since this was my first flash, it was very experimental. I am working to get better, but thanks for the review.
For a first flash movie this was probably pretty good, I've never made a flash myself, but I saw soooo many flashes worse than this one ;)
Some scenes were a bit too long though, like the one with the eye
and the screen was a bit messy at some points
Thanks, will work on it. Try watching it in lower quality if scenes go to slow.
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