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This is just a sprite animation i am making currently and i wanted to let people review it before i released the entire thing. The plot is in the info button and hopefully i get the first episode out by 2 weeks or so. So watch and enjoy!

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Almost like the Awakining

its very simliar to it except its riku/adam being the one. btw the marluxia sprite u used he is a guy but in your series he is a girl just giving u the heads up on that. anyway its pretty good for the storyline the ony thing I ask is better animating the sprties

POIZIN responds:

The full first episode has been released.

It's good. Not great.

To be honest, it seems more like just a Kingdom Hearts animation. Off of a Kingdom Hearts scene.
Here are my suggestions:
1. Original sprites
2. Sprites breathing, making them go up and down, so they don't look like just blocks sitting there
3. Better text, looks very plain.
4. Make the intro more lively
5. Make intro buttons more lively, they are just basically rectangles with text. Make Keys or Keyholes or something that has to do with the plot.
6. The music just STOPS if you watch it for a while, so you may want to fix that. Loop it maybe.

It has potential, but definitely make some original sprites.

I want more soon

you have a great idea, i just hope you can find some bigger characters or a way to show more details, i would be nice if you can some how add voices instead of just text, but i´m waiting for this, really anxious

POIZIN responds:

Thanks man.

Okay

It was okay. Might I suggest that when you make the full animation that you use original sprites. It just felt so unoriginal when you were using the Riku and Marluxia sprites. But I like your idea behind it and I hope to see the final version. Good luck on it!

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Votes
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Score
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Uploaded
Oct 17, 2009
8:53 PM EDT
Genre
Drama