pretty

i know its your first time, but its really good, i also just posted my first one, i think the next one will be better

Uh...

Well to start off with, the story is just ridiculous. Even if he didn't (SPOILERS) die at the end I wouldn't have been interested in what would've happened, sorry to say. The animation was very poor too.

I would be fair about it considering the wide shots of streets because it's hard to pull those off, but it didn't look like any effort was put into them either.

Don't rush it to post on Newgrounds next time. Spend time working on it and then post it. A bunch of bad animations are worse to have than one decent one.

not al storries have ahppy endings

and not ll flashes are good, this one

is not good.
Most of the time i could not tell what was going on
work on your art a lot and your animation for next time