Plot: Andrew and Eddie are in "lunchroom" mind my drawing, and there discussing on how Eddie can get a chick, somewhat, and how V is andrews secret lover *wink*
I know my drawing is horrible but i guarantee its way better than the previous one. Thank you for taking the time to watch.
Ok Start nothing spectacular
It has to be a little more broadened out. There are too many things that only you seem to understand or aren't actually funny to the masses of Newgrounds. However, there is a good premise for this and can seem to get somewhere.
I love how you wrote this meanwhile you were in on it aswell.
Funny but needs serios work
you get a star for humor but there are several problems that i am sure you have heard several times by now.
1> stick legs... common, really? and here i was thinking that we graduated from stick figures....... nope.
2> the plot is good but the script needs work. also the text kinda going a little too fast for all of our viewers to keep up..
3> voice overs... you did it for the girl why not finish it and give the guys one too.
other than that it was funny but that isn't enough to pass
Well it did pass and i do appreciate your honest criticism. My work will develop over time. Anyways thanks for the review
So So.
There was a good story line but the art was a little too stiff. The ending also lost me.
Lol. Get it? V looks like a pair of spread legs.