Good Shit

I like the other video you did better but this still made me chuckle and did you ever hook up with that chick

AWESOME

My entire day was complete SHIT, until I came across this.

This flash was bad and made the reviewer sad.

Your 3rd submission to Newgrounds. Welcome back.

Your flash is a about a boy and his present {his gift} which explodes in his face. Then a large penis falls on top of him. The story is also propelled along by an array of well scripted poetic dialog. But very little happens and there is nothing which adds any sparkle to the story, although the ending is fairly sentimental.

The storyline in this flash is somewhat amusing, but the idea alone is rather mundane. There is a huge lack of content; there is no depth to the story. Make the plot far more motivating by creating an abundance of emotion through telling the audience about the boy or giving off signals of tension as to what's in the box. You need to make your stories more memorable and kozmorulz's voice could play a major role in this.

Graphically, black and white flashes are almost like a genre in its right, but this is a bad example of one. Although there is some smooth animation in this flash, it cannot stand up for itself when it comes to a complete lack of detail and design. It is pleasing to see a step up from a stick-man, complete with expressions, but is not acceptable to leave the background and environment completely blank. Make use of colour toning and if you prefer to leave it black and white adjust the brightness to create layers. Also I cannot understand why there is a small blue line across the boy's face.

You can improve the graphics by perhaps placing the boy in a room or by using thought bubbles to show the boy's thinking. If you were to use colours try dressing him in something unusual or add veins to the penis.

The sound is the highlight in this flash. The voiceover is clean. The script is bright and clever; it tells the limited story exclusively. But where are the other sounds? Most flashes at least have an audio track or some sound effects. The audio is not complete. Try adding a subtle, but comical, background track and give the penis collapse a fine crashing (or squidgy) sound.

In a race this flash would be near the back. The whole package just isn't up to scratch. It is a blank canvass that has been covered in a few pretty leaves and dressed with a slightly humorous aura. Without signs of real effort it looks like something made when flash animation was old. Although I can see your attempts to be creative, there needs to be more substance and greater visual exposure. If you work hard at it, i'm sure your commitments can be very impressive.

Sammi

* * ( 2 - 10 ) "Feeble"

ehhh.

it was short but the plot was nominally creative and i agree the ryme was funny, the animation was less than what ive seen with others but was still better than some i have seen.

You must be really, really, bored.

Really dude. Bored.