Syntax junkie

I personally love your animatic style. It's refreshing to see something so sketchy on Newgrounds. I have some minor issues with your spelling in some places - such as one instance of "you're" spelt "your." Also I feel you overuse certain punctuation marks exclusively; such as ellipsis where you could easily use a comma, double exclamation marks where a full stop would certainly function better. I don't like to wait for the text to scroll to the end. Perhaps you could implement a skip feature? A little more music wouldn't hurt either...

Quite enjoyable

I thought this was pretty nice. I'm not really a fan of these flashes where you just click for dialogue and there really isn't much action but I'll recommend it if only for the animation. It was very admirable and quite original at least.

Nice

It's a great concept. I felt like I was watching an animatic from an anime-style video game. You know like the ones they got on the DS. Anyway I like your art style its very pleasing to the eye.

I have to tell you I'm a big fan of a series with a great story and it seems like you're on the right track. I'll be sure to keep up with the series if you keep up the good work.

Nice animatic

Art: good - sketchy, but that's okay.
Animation: acceptable level for an animatic.
Story: many elements typical of anime, but well told.
Style: evident, but needs to be refined.

Now it just needs the upgrade to full-fledged animation. If or when that happens, I'd recommend adding a few close-ups to the secnes. Watching two characters in the same spot can get dull after a while.

Overall: 4/5, 7/10.

Well

The storytelling really shines here and if you keep this up you are really going to need to make sure it stays on top. Since this is more like watching an animatic then an animation - if you ever consider turning this into an animation I might be able to help you out - a lot.

Keep at it!