confusing...?

Drawing style was nice, and it was a good start. Don't give up!

But the gym stereotypes were a little cliche. All women at the gym don't look like that or run for hours a day. All men at the gym aren't bulked bodybuilders on steroids. I also was confused when the bodybuilder was showing off his muscles, then suddenly a still image appeared of a hairy ugly arm with orange around it. It felt a little too Ren-and-Stimpy to me.

I also had an extremely hard time making out what they were saying. You might want to go back in and add subtitles or word bubbles.

Maybe I am slow, but I just didn't get the point of the clip. I'm a "normal" person who uses a gym, and I never meet people like Ms Runner and Mr Bodybuilder. If someone isn't sure how to use gym equipment, go with an experienced friend or hire a trainer.

Thanks for sharing this! Cute artwork. Hope to see more from you.

good job

i really like the art work

Pretty amateur sumbission.

I saw good things and bad things in this flash. I think your animation tyle is very interesting. Steve kinda looked like Rayman in my opinion. I like how you gave Steve and Leo each distinctive personalities, I found that it made it easier to relate to them. It was a decent flash animation.

The sound was painful to listen to, and I could barely understand a word Leo was saying becuase of the voice you used for him. The plot got really fry as it went on, I lost most interest after the treadmill scene. The ending really wasn't too satisfying either, it just ended with a saying. Needless to say, more depth is needed.

By watching your flash I can tell that you can improve your abilities. I think you just need to get a higher quality voice resolution and thicken the storyline, that should gain you more success. Keep up the good work!

It was OK

I find this movie as being ok but I know it could be better. The biggest con about it is that voices are very unclear (except the main taller character). I'm not from a english-speaking country and even though I know English a little bit it was very hard to understand what the characters were saying. The second thing is that the movie ends with no real conclusion.

Anyway... It was OK and I encourage you to improve your next submissions. Try to have a better audio or add subtitles. Keep working!

errmm...

great animation.
the sound editing is great, you have the background noises and music well placed and such.

but the voices were 2 soft, i had to turn it up, which didn't help much since the background noise of the treadmill was at the same level of the voices, if you don't want to turn up the volume of the voices, add compression to them so they stick out more.

and there was too much talking, i couldn't wach the whole thing becouse the soft mellow voices and the humming of the treadmill made me sleepy with slow/repeditive animation didn't help (though the animation in itself WAS good)

this submission is passable.. but work on making the voices more listenable, and try having lesss talking, kind a way to keep convo's short so that no person talks for more then about 3 seconds at a time(ish) and within 10-30 secinds something should happen/apear to change what we are seeing/hearing to keep us interested.

well.. that's my opinion, like i said, this made me fall asleep so I couldn't wach the whole thing in feer of passing out.
but since the animation was so great, I deem it passable.

Cheers :), and good work.

Nick_B