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Mike and Taylor 1

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hey guys.... first time making a flash video on newgrounds...
dis is about two kids in our school, who really hate each other.
happy to take any crtisicm.. i know it might suck.

UPDATE:
Thanks, ill try to make mine less suckish =p

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uh well it sucked so tick off

i guess

ill give it a 3 just because of the song. also wen the ppl talk, make it so we can actually read the hole thing.

Yeah....OK...

Ok hum...Maybe if you improve your drawing skills and make your video longer, it'll be OK... But now, its short, and the drawings are...so-so..

hmmm

really short, I can sense that this is probably not the best you can do, I say that because although you just used stick figures, and it was pretty short you did a good job with the sound, especially for a first submission, and judging from the fact that you drew the ak47 pretty well I would guess that you are actually hiding a good deal of your skill in this animation. For your next animation, really give it a lot of effort, cause I have a feeling you could evole into quite the flash artist if you wanted to.

Needs alot of work...

This flash is 6.7 meg, so obviously you've imported and entire song and exported it at full quality.
Next time, stream your audio so only the portion you use is exported, as well go into the publishing preferences and make sure your audio exports at a lower quality.

Now for some other tips... If you're gonna use stick man, they better be 60 fps, flying round with guns and swords and high detailed action packed fighting other wise, they're just proof of laziness.
Comedy was okay at best... punchline too the story was a little weak...
And finally, length, this was far too short to be a good flash. The 2-3 minute range is the sweet spot for "short" flashes, with the more epic, story driven, flashes being as long as 10minutes.

Hope this wall of text was at all helpful.

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3,818
Votes
12
Score
1.38 / 5.00

Uploaded
Feb 6, 2009
5:25 PM EST