good for the first time

just put a preloader and i wouldve given you a 10

woah!

This is simply amazing considering it's your first work ever in flash, normally people wouldn't post their first animations on the net, i would but i lost mine when my old computer blew up xD Of course the animation could be a lot better but people don't take into account that it's your first animation :) it's very good and it had a good storyline with it as well, im sure if you keep practicing you'll do very well, i'll suggest doing a remake in a year or too just so you can tell the difference, would be interesting :) I hope that you'll do well in making more flash animations, best of luck with it

i liked it

the graphics could have been better but ill still give you a 10 out of 10

for ur 1st flash good job

its alright man it could use some work!

Well,

It's not a bad idea for a story, and it has some heart in it. But the graphics and animation lack any sort of style whatsoever, and are very poorly executed. This detracts greatly from said storyline, making it impossible to relate to and hence useless.
But I didn't blam, because this entry obviously has some thought behind it.

When you're better at Flash, you could make something truly brilliant, methinks.