ha cool!
some pretty cool stuff, after i read the bear one i was like O_O but yeah lol hope to see some other stuff from you :)
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Just some poems i did for English. Some by me (won't have any name on them), and some by other poets who are usually famous. Press the Next Page buttons or what ever is there to go to the next page (DUH!)
:EDIT:
Ok i added better buttons like people asked! so enjoy being able to click things more easily!
but i didn't do the contents page buttons. :(
aww you guys are so nice! I love all these comments, but I still don't have the grade because my English teacher from last year can't open the flash so i'll give her the link to it maybe!
:EDIT:
Sure i know no one will ever see this but WTH ill write it anyways, well ill never get my mark now, 2 years later so nvm although i have realised flash just isn't for me, although i am obliged to shout out for my friend vonsallian for his music, check it out
vancleff responds:
don't worry, you will.
Very nice to see something different.
I loved these poems, and I hope that this submission isn't going to be the first and last poem submission.
vancleff responds:
It's not going to be the last by me! i'm gonna make another in a month or two!
Very Nice
It's nice to see something other than hentai from someone that, as far as I know, doesn't submit much (or anything at all). The poems were pretty good. You definately know what your style is (as for the others, I would have to read more of there's to say for sure), and you know how to get a message across without bringing profanity into it. You also have a good understanding of how to present a poem (as showed by Time) to get the reader(s) to understand what you are trying to say.
Now, onto the constructive critism. Although the submission looked finished, it seemed to be lacking something. What exactly that missing piece is, I don't know. But, I would agree with others when they say to make the buttons easier to use. Also, some of the poems were hard to read because of the text being squished into the confines of the box. Perhaps you should think of making the longer ones multiple pages, that way people can read them without a microscope. The backgrounds were okay, but either too bright or too bland. It was good that you gave each peom it's a different background than the previous one, but the colors didn't always match the vibe.
So, all in all, I would say good job, and continue to improve both your poetry and you flash skills.
vancleff responds:
Thanks! i've fixed the buttons due to the overwhelming majority wanting me to so enjoy it!
i see
It is very nice to see someone else do this t truly is. I have been messing around with Narrative submissions now since November and no they do not getthe highest scores.
As for the poems the are alright, but you still have room to grow.
Keep trying and learning :)
Wow, quite a nice change from the norm.
Well, I'm an inspiring poet myself, and I must say I'm glad to see something like this hit Newgrounds.
Your poetry was well done, very unique, almost story telling like style.
Best of luck with your poetry.
vancleff responds:
Thanks, but don't you mean aspiring poet? PM me some of your poems!
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