The killing of the white mage was a little un-needed. seriously. But it was cool anyways, can't wait till it's finished, spelling does need some work and the language could stand to be expanded a bit. like a bit less cursing could be good, they should only curse when it's to show how serious something is, not to joke around ok?
oh yes, cut that intro to about the last part of it with your name, the name sliding back and forth and stuff just seems like an excuse to apply some effects into the movie that are otherwise useless. If you don't want to change that, then you can always make a "skip intro" button somewhere.
one last thing, I'm a slower reader sometimes, especially after 12:00 midnight, be nice if you could choose when to advance to the next message, but it's probably not important.
keep up the good work and get it finished ya hear.